Edits to HER DAO article

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 id: threefold_herdao_dar
 title: ThreeFold X H.E.R. DAO – Cultivating Digital Sovereignty and Inclusive Innovation in Dar Es Salaam
 image_caption: ThreeFold x H.E.R. DAO
-description: ThreeFold is building the engine for an Internet where people can finally be data sovereign.
+description: Learn about a developer meetup we co-hosted this week in Dar Es Salaam, the next step forward for the Dunia Yetu.
 date: 2024-02-08
 taxonomies:
     people: [sam_taggart]
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-This Monday, ThreeFold, in collaboration with [H.E.R DAO](https://www.her-dao.xyz/), orchestrated a developer meetup in Dar Es Salaam that brought together a group of 55 participants. The event unfolded as a platform for insights, discussions, and actionable steps aimed at fostering digital sovereignty and inclusive innovation in Tanzania.
+This Monday, ThreeFold, in collaboration with [H.E.R DAO](https://www.her-dao.xyz/), orchestrated a meetup in Dar Es Salaam that brought together a group of more than 50 students, developers, and members of the tech community. The gathering unfolded as a platform for insights, discussions, and actionable steps aimed at fostering digital sovereignty and inclusive innovation in Tanzania.
 
-### **Interactive workshop and technical demos | Deploying a Sovereign Internet Infrastructure**
+### **Interactive Workshop and Technical Demos | Deploying a Sovereign Internet Infrastructure**
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+Kristof De Spiegeleer, co-founder of ThreeFold, shared key insights into deploying a sovereign Internet in Tanzania. He highlighted the necessity of such an infrastructure and outlined actionable steps for the community on how to connect capacity and build on top of this transformative Internet platform.
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 ![Kristof](./kristof_dar.png)
 
-Kristof De Spiegeleer, the driving force behind ThreeFold, shared crucial insights into deploying a sovereign internet in Tanzania. He highlighted the necessity of such infrastructure and outlined actionable steps for the community to connect capacity and build on top of this transformative Internet ecosystem.
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-He also presented how this vision will be brought to life in Tanzania through the Dunia Yetu initiative - A collaborative initiative led by ThreeFold, in partnership with the Tanzanian ICT Commission, Holochain, and the Dar Es Salaam tech community, to reshape the digital landscape in Tanzania and East Africa
+Kristof also presented how this vision will be brought to life in Tanzania through the Dunia Yetu initiative - A collaborative movement led by ThreeFold, in partnership with the Tanzanian ICT Commission, Holochain, and the Dar Es Salaam tech community, to reshape the digital landscape in Tanzania and East Africa.
 
 ### **Hands-On Demos**
 
-Interested developers and tech attendees were treated to practical demonstrations of how to connect hardware to a sovereign Internet infrastructure with some members of the community and  Kristof.
+Interested developers and tech-advanced attendees were treated to practical demonstrations of how to connect hardware to a sovereign Internet infrastructure, led by some members of the community and supported by Kristof.
 
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-The session continued with a demonstration of the deployment process for this Internet framework, enabling them to learn and better understand the process, while being able to discuss and ask questions.
+The session continued with a demonstration of the deployment process for this Internet framework, enabling them to learn and better understand the process, while being able to discuss and ask questions. Some of the attendees were then onboarded with the manual and invited to join our various communication channels for support, as needed.
 
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+### **Empowering Diversity and Inclusivity with H.E.R. DAO, “If We Want The Future To Look Like Us, WE Have To Build It.”**
 
-### **Empowering diversity and inclusivity with H.E.R. DAO, “If We Want The Future To Look Like Us, WE Have To Build It.”**
+Tracey Bowen (founder) introduced H.E.R. DAO, a dynamic developer DAO with a strong commitment to championing diversity and inclusion in Web3. H.E.R. DAO focuses on increasing diversity in the blockchain ecosystem, especially empowering women that are not represented enough in the field. H.E.R. DAO's objective is to increase diversity in the blockchain ecosystem through hackathons, bootcamps, conferences, and grant programs.
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-Tracey Bowen (founder) introduced H.E.R. DAO, a dynamic developer DAO with a strong commitment to championing diversity and inclusion in Web3. H.E.R. DAO focuses on increasing diversity in the blockchain ecosystem, especially empowering women that are not represented enough in that field. H.E.R. DAO's objective is to increase diversity in the blockchain ecosystem through hackathons, bootcamps, conferences, and grant programs.
 
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-More info on H.E.R. DAO : [her-dao.xyz](https://www.her-dao.xyz)
+We're looking forward to collaborating more with Tracey and H.E.R. DAO. In the meantime if you'd like to learn more, you can find info on H.E.R. DAO here : [her-dao.xyz](https://www.her-dao.xyz)
 
-![Tracey and Kristof](./tracey_kristof_dar.png)
+### **Building Momentum, Building Community**
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-### **Another Step Forward**
 
 The event drew an excited crowd, including members of the tech community, developers and curious students eager to contribute to the envisioned sovereign digital future in Tanzania.
 
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+![Tracey and Kristof](./tracey_kristof_dar.png)
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 The community's interest continues to grow stronger and stronger – 200 members already on our Whatsapp community group – and we look forward to collaborating to make this vision a reality.
 
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-Overall, The ThreeFold X H.E.R. DAO meetup was a convergence of minds, ideas, and actions, marking the next step towards cultivating a digital ecosystem that is not only technologically advanced but also inclusive and accessible. The commitment to building a better sovereign future in Tanzania echoed throughout, setting the stage for collaborative initiatives that will drive positive change in the region.
+Overall, The ThreeFold X H.E.R. DAO meetup was a convergence of minds, ideas, and actions, marking the next step towards cultivating a digital ecosystem that is not only future-facing but also inclusive and accessible. The commitment to building a better sovereign future in Tanzania echoed throughout, setting the stage for collaborative initiatives that will drive positive change in the region.
 
 ### Next Steps
 
-The team is working to grow Dunia Yetu by expanding the community involvement in the project. This involves creating a robust online presence and organizing further interactive workshops and events.
+The team is working to grow Dunia Yetu by expanding the community involvement in the project. This involves creating a robust online presence, organizing further interactive workshops and events, and better defining community roles.
 
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-Tangible next steps which Dunia Yetu is taking to build this new internet include:
+Tangible next steps include:
 
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+- Launching Dunia Yetu web presence
+- Better defining participation opportunities and gathering interest / feedback from the community
 - Deploying 100 nodes in Dar es Salaam
-- Gathering a Coding Academy team 
+- Inviting and empowering developers to deploy on top of this local infrastructure
+- Gathering a Coding Academy team
 - Creating a curriculum for workshops, training sessions, and educational programs as part of the Coding Academy
 - Establishing the first six innovation hubs across Tanzania with the ICT Commission